Concentric Circles: The first step I need to take to write an informative essay is to brainstorm. I made concentric circles in class. I listed out the things I like, I love, and I know. For my likes, I chose hamburgers, trees, miss Hannah, miss Laura, purple, Apple, my aunt, my mom, and my dad. I enjoy spending time with the people I listed because they always make me feel warm. For my loves, I chose my mom, my dad, my aunt, trees, and hamburgers. For the things I know a lot about, I chose my auntie and my mom. However, I don't want other people to know a lot about my mom ( secret ) so writing about my aunt is a pretty good choice. I am also very knowledgeable about my aunt due to the fact that we were pretty close together so I think it's a pretty good choice for me. I actually wrote one short piece about my mom so I think that I can share it with you when I feel comfortable.
Organizing: I used graphic organizers to help myself get organized. Getting organized helped me a lot when I actually started writing. Organizers guide me from each sentence to the other and it structured my story perfectly. Without graphic organizers, I would have written a "poopy" writing piece. I spent about 3 class periods making a graphic organizer in my notebook even though my teacher gave us a graphic organizer and I think it was the best choice for me to make it in my notebook. It's probably the second step to take on your journey of writing. Since this was very helpful to me, I am sure that I will use this again in the future. The last thing I want to say about organizers is: I LOVE YOU, GRAPHIC ORGANIZERS! THANKS FOR HELPING ME THROUGH MY WRITING PROCESS.
Mentor Texts: After spending a lot of time reading and discussing about the writing piece example miss Hannah gave our class, I was amazed. The way the author wrote the introduction hooked the reader in the very first sentence. Because it was a main idea and supporting details piece, the author was very clear in the body paragraphs. When you read the whole piece, you can understand how clear and precise the author was in each paragraph. I always try my best to make my main idea and details descriptive and clear as possible. Ms. Hannah taught my class about transition words and she have asked us to use it in our writing. This author also used plenty of transition words which helps the readers understand how does this sentence connect to the other one. I was most interested in the conclusion. The author added a joke at the very end and my partner and I laughed so hard. In my opinion, I think it's a very good way to end the story because it will make the readers feel comfortable reading your piece next time. Thanks to the author for writing such a wonderful writing piece!
Sentence Fluency: Sentence fluency helps to make our sentences flow and become more interesting. I considered a lot about sentence starters at the very beginning so I only changed about 5 sentences in my article and I feel more confident after replacing the sentence starters because it is more interesting. Here are some of the sentences I changed:
She respects everyone's opinions and she cares about all of us.
Fixed : When I talk to her, she always demonstrates respect and care.
I changed my sentence to the other sentence because I used too many shes in my story. I learned that we can add different actions or time to the beginning so I changed it to the other sentence which I think is better. Here are some ways to start your sentences.
An adverb
EX: suddenly, surprisingly, jubilantly
A past participle phrase
EX: written by the author of " djhhfbjdjbbx"
A dependent clause
EX: even though our team lost,
The subject
EX: the baby, Sue
A present participle phrase
EX: talking to my partner
A prepositional phrase
EX: under the table
Revising and Editing: I focused on combining sentences and making the more related to the story while I edited and revised my piece. I have added a lot of facts and personal experiences while writing so I wasn't adding any of these later. Transition words help me link the sentences in my story so it's organized. My class and I were taught different types of leads. I used a quotation lead for this piece because I think it's the best one. My piece is better than two weeks ago because it's all my effort with all the help from miss Hannah and my friends. Thanks for all your support.
If you would like to read the final piece, please look at my next post. Thanks for reading my reflection.
Organizing: I used graphic organizers to help myself get organized. Getting organized helped me a lot when I actually started writing. Organizers guide me from each sentence to the other and it structured my story perfectly. Without graphic organizers, I would have written a "poopy" writing piece. I spent about 3 class periods making a graphic organizer in my notebook even though my teacher gave us a graphic organizer and I think it was the best choice for me to make it in my notebook. It's probably the second step to take on your journey of writing. Since this was very helpful to me, I am sure that I will use this again in the future. The last thing I want to say about organizers is: I LOVE YOU, GRAPHIC ORGANIZERS! THANKS FOR HELPING ME THROUGH MY WRITING PROCESS.
Mentor Texts: After spending a lot of time reading and discussing about the writing piece example miss Hannah gave our class, I was amazed. The way the author wrote the introduction hooked the reader in the very first sentence. Because it was a main idea and supporting details piece, the author was very clear in the body paragraphs. When you read the whole piece, you can understand how clear and precise the author was in each paragraph. I always try my best to make my main idea and details descriptive and clear as possible. Ms. Hannah taught my class about transition words and she have asked us to use it in our writing. This author also used plenty of transition words which helps the readers understand how does this sentence connect to the other one. I was most interested in the conclusion. The author added a joke at the very end and my partner and I laughed so hard. In my opinion, I think it's a very good way to end the story because it will make the readers feel comfortable reading your piece next time. Thanks to the author for writing such a wonderful writing piece!
Sentence Fluency: Sentence fluency helps to make our sentences flow and become more interesting. I considered a lot about sentence starters at the very beginning so I only changed about 5 sentences in my article and I feel more confident after replacing the sentence starters because it is more interesting. Here are some of the sentences I changed:
She respects everyone's opinions and she cares about all of us.
Fixed : When I talk to her, she always demonstrates respect and care.
I changed my sentence to the other sentence because I used too many shes in my story. I learned that we can add different actions or time to the beginning so I changed it to the other sentence which I think is better. Here are some ways to start your sentences.
An adverb
EX: suddenly, surprisingly, jubilantly
A past participle phrase
EX: written by the author of " djhhfbjdjbbx"
A dependent clause
EX: even though our team lost,
The subject
EX: the baby, Sue
A present participle phrase
EX: talking to my partner
A prepositional phrase
EX: under the table
Revising and Editing: I focused on combining sentences and making the more related to the story while I edited and revised my piece. I have added a lot of facts and personal experiences while writing so I wasn't adding any of these later. Transition words help me link the sentences in my story so it's organized. My class and I were taught different types of leads. I used a quotation lead for this piece because I think it's the best one. My piece is better than two weeks ago because it's all my effort with all the help from miss Hannah and my friends. Thanks for all your support.
If you would like to read the final piece, please look at my next post. Thanks for reading my reflection.